2019-12-03, 16:42
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Join Date: Dec 2016
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wow you lasted longer than I did. I got up to ~ch500 before throwing in the towel. I liked the first ~300 chapters but after a point I found myself disliking the mc. The writing also started to bug me. i.e. the confrontation with Raul and later with Finn seemed rather cheap
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2019-12-03, 22:12
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Confused Shark
Join Date: Oct 2007
Location: Atlantis
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^U want more dramatic netori?
There are parts that can be improved But the fact is this is a better Danmachi (also better FSN so far) while also far better than most harem novels in narou The harem also got reset after changing world so it got fresh again
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2019-12-04, 00:23
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Join Date: Dec 2016
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haha, no rather the events with Raul and Finn were TOO dramatic and poorly executed. I've also only read a couple of novels of Danmachi so I can't really compare it :S
Like the MC walks up to Raul out of nowhere and brings up the fact that Aki is pregnant and happy, then straight after it asks "Hey, gathering a group of guy friends wanna join?". Was cringing the whole way thro that scene. Then the issues with Finn and Lili seemed off. It felt like the author was forcing his views of the characters in the original material into his story. Pursuing personal agenda and introducing tensions within the raid group while they were in the dungeon seemed out of Finn's character since he was the leader of the whole thing. Though I guess some of the awkwardness/forcefulness could be summed up to Vahn just not liking guys. He has a very apparent double standard for males and females. As for the harem, I agree it was done well for awhile. But it kept growing... until the point where the MC was forgetting promises and didn't have enough time to spend with the girls. Some of them just fade into the background. I actually skipped ahead to the Nasuverse part and gave it a go. Didn't get far tho, Vahn comes across as arrogant and was making more of the same relationship mistakes because of how he believes the world should be. |
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2019-12-04, 00:31
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Confused Shark
Join Date: Oct 2007
Location: Atlantis
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^The Raul one yea lol~
There's a reason why most male population hates Vahn  For Finn, I think that was what supposed to happen if Lili, a Pallum, became as strong as in this version In the original, Finn wants a super heir In Nasuverse, didn't get to be arrogant for long coz got his ass kicked by Scathach and Ozymandias
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2019-12-06, 02:08
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Senior Member
Join Date: Dec 2016
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one of the things I like about Nasuverse is the mages and their mentality. This is probably what forces the story to be more mature. Though I'd probably not be much of a fan of Vahn in Nasuverse given his sense of "justice". He'd be picking fights with alot of mages |
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