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The first bit, where they are being a bit awkward isn't too bad. Once the actual sex starts, then yeah I found it a bit over the top; especially the notorious 'glug glug' ending. Also, to me it didn't really fit how the rest of the physics / physical interactions were described (not that there was a huge amount of detail to those).
Personally, I'd prefer to trade that story for a sentence or two in "morning dew girl", no need to be graphic, but something more than "they had been falling asleep everynight cuddling in each others arms".
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