Okay I'm back, and with some better rebuttals.
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It seems to me that the Hakumei seem quite a bit like the Akatsuke, just collecting crystals instead of Jinchuuriki. And I noticed that a couple of the members look very familiar. Maybe you didn't even notice yourself
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I did notice from when I created the group up until now, if you want to make comparisions on subtle motifs, you could compare Kuromeru & Shiroi to Zabuza & Haku. I'm trying to make Raiu different from Naruto in the aspect that the choices and plots are different yet similar in the feeling and the action. The entire backstory of Hakumei is a spoiler and I will not reveal it at this time, however since they are going after sacred artifacts I should think that they would need no less than 2-men at any which time, considering the shinobi villages wouldn't just hand them over like they did jinchuuriki. Did you suspect that there maybe more to Hakumei than meet's the eye, their overall plot has yet to be revealed so it is too early to make assumptions, I posted Hakumei Role Call merely to show what may come in future's time, it is not an official critique.
The only conceivable resemblance to Zabuza I can detect is the greatsword Ryuuk wields, besides that he uses Katon primarily NOT Suiton, and he hails from Konoha NOT Kirigakure. Ryuuk and Zabuza are on two different worlds and levels, Ryuuk's sword absorbs large portions of blood from the victim, where as Zabuza's saber does not have any special qualities. I honestly don't know why you compared these two they look nothing alike aside from the greatswords, and I have yet to see a rule stating that only nin from Kiri could possess one.
What, because he has long bangs and likes to blow stuff up? Unlike Dei, Kag's specialty IS transforming things into bombs, not chewing up clay and using a jutsu to make it into C4. Kagerou was Kumogakure's ariel bombadier specialist, and a tinkerer before that, and he even rides a cloud he can summon. Besides his long hair has no resemblence at all to deidara in this case, it looks more like Ryoko. Not to mention Kagerou is more of a trickster/playful than just a crazed bloodthirsty villain.
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Ryouga=Dousu, now I have to say they look exactly like each other
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I was going for the Dosu look as far as the furry cape thing goes, and a little Kakuzu in the mask. I don't know what his face shall look like yet.
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Koujoumaru=Orochimaru, I know you can definitely see the resemblence in facial features and the names
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To put it, the extension "Maru" is ever present in shounen manga and anime everywhere and I will give you some examples in Naruto: "Shikamaru', "Yashamaru", "Konohomaru", "Genyumaru","Kidomaru", and of course "Orchimaru". Notice that I had at least five names listed before I even listed Oro's name. Kagemaru is also a popular name, but not in Naruto. And as far as his personality goes, Koujoumaru is not much like Orochimaru, if anything he's more Posion Ivy, if you judge solely on appearances you might as well compare Dosu to Zabuza, they looked like they could be brothers. Koujou = plant; Koujoumaru = plant type not snake freaky pedo type.
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Taiga Suihoshi=Kisame, now this one doesn't look as much alike as the others do but there are some similarities.
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Why, because he hails from Mist, or has the teeth? Everyone we have encountered from the hidden mist so far has had the same shark-like teeth: "Zabuza", "Kisame", and "Suigetsu", with the exception of Haku.
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Now I'm not trying to say your stealing characters or anything like that. I was just amused by the similarities.
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Right, but obviously whatever distinct similarities exist are apparent to the author (i.e. Ryouga/Kakuzu (or Dosu) was a dead give away). It wasn't necessary to go through and individually point them all out to me in a post, obviously there are going to be some unavoidable similarities this IS Naruto and not Full Metal Alchemist, the laws/techniques are different in Naruto and it's difficult coming up with a decent S-Class villain with entirely unique abilities who can't get pawned by let's say: Ino Yamanaka. I was amused at how you made it seem like I was trying to cover-up a crime scene or something.
Don't get me wrong I value criticism and even more so, constructive criticism. However, when there's nothing being made but comparisions on the appearances of said individuals its not really criticism. You probably didn't mention any of their skills or kekkai-genkai's in your critique because alot of them haven't been revealed yet, and I simply don't wish to spoil the future I merely want to give a snippit of things to come and do be warned that these all may change within time (i.e. names - everything).